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Orijinalden alıntı: Cisim Geldi

Yani yazdıklarınız doğru mu ?

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Orijinalden alıntı: Seraphine

Ödev olduğu için formal bir yazı olması gerektiğini düşüyorum , düzelttiğim her yer yanlış değil.

Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I have no brother or sister , so I am only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying in Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch the basketball in free times. In future , I will want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want study at Toursim Faculty so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like one of them. In the working life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen her quality songs.

Yanlış varsa diğer arkadaşlar da düzeltsinler , yardımcı olabildiysem ne mutlu.

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Orijinalden alıntı: WhiteCorpuscle

quote: Orijinalden alıntı: Seraphine Ödev olduğu için formal bir yazı olması gerektiğini düşüyorum , düzelttiğim her yer yanlış değil. Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I have no brother or sister , so I am only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying in Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch the basketball in free times. In future , I will want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want study at Toursim Faculty so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like one of them. In the working life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen her quality songs. Yanlış varsa diğer arkadaşlar da düzeltsinler , yardımcı olabildiysem ne mutlu.

Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I haven't got any brother or sister , so I am the only child in my family. I am studying at Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying at Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch basketball matches in my free time. In the future , I want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want to study at Tourism Faculty because working in tourism endustry is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so I want to work there in the future. As I said , I want this job because the members of my family have really good careers in this business area because of that I want to be a person like one of them. In business life , I will take care of money and comfort of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and listening to her best songs. Kusura bakmayin biraz gec oldu unuttugum verdigim spzu. Uyku saskini ufak yanlislar olabilir kusuruma bakmayin. İyi geceler.

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Orijinalden alıntı: NevaMind

quote: Orijinalden alıntı: Cisim Geldi Yani yazdıklarınız doğru mu ?

Düzelten kişinin paragrafındaki ''In future , I will want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want study at Toursim Faculty'' yerine ''I want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want to study at Toursim Faculty.'' yazarsan bir gramer hatası kalmıyor sanırım..Başka hata gören düzeltsin.

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Orijinalden alıntı: Seraphine

Ödev olduğu için formal bir yazı olması gerektiğini düşüyorum , düzelttiğim her yer yanlış değil.

Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I have no brother or sister , so I am only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying in Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch the basketball in free times. In future , I will want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want study at Toursim Faculty so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like one of them. In the working life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen her quality songs.

Yanlış varsa diğer arkadaşlar da düzeltsinler , yardımcı olabildiysem ne mutlu.

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Orijinalden alıntı: ABABA2307

quote: Orijinalden alıntı: WhiteCorpuscle quote: Orijinalden alıntı: Seraphine Ödev olduğu için formal bir yazı olması gerektiğini düşüyorum , düzelttiğim her yer yanlış değil. Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I have no brother or sister , so I am only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying in Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch the basketball in free times. In future , I will want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want study at Toursim Faculty so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like one of them. In the working life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen her quality songs. Yanlış varsa diğer arkadaşlar da düzeltsinler , yardımcı olabildiysem ne mutlu. Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I haven't got any brother or sister , so I am the only child in my family. I am studying at Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying at Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch basketball matches in my free time. In the future , I want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want to study at Tourism Faculty because working in tourism endustry is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so I want to work there in the future. As I said , I want this job because the members of my family have really good careers in this business area because of that I want to be a person like one of them. In business life , I will take care of money and comfort of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and listening to her best songs. Kusura bakmayin biraz gec oldu unuttugum verdigim spzu. Uyku saskini ufak yanlislar olabilir kusuruma bakmayin. İyi geceler.

Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I haven't got any brothers or sisters , so I am the only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before that , I graduated from Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch basketball matches in my free times. In the future , I want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want to study at Toursim Faculty, so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in the future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like them. In the business life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen to her quality songs.

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Orijinalden alıntı: ABABA2307

quote: Orijinalden alıntı: WhiteCorpuscle quote: Orijinalden alıntı: Seraphine Ödev olduğu için formal bir yazı olması gerektiğini düşüyorum , düzelttiğim her yer yanlış değil. Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I have no brother or sister , so I am only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying in Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch the basketball in free times. In future , I will want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want study at Toursim Faculty so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like one of them. In the working life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen her quality songs. Yanlış varsa diğer arkadaşlar da düzeltsinler , yardımcı olabildiysem ne mutlu. Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I haven't got any brother or sister , so I am the only child in my family. I am studying at Mehmet Akif High School. Before there , I was studying at Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch basketball matches in my free time. In the future , I want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want to study at Tourism Faculty because working in tourism endustry is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so I want to work there in the future. As I said , I want this job because the members of my family have really good careers in this business area because of that I want to be a person like one of them. In business life , I will take care of money and comfort of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and listening to her best songs. Kusura bakmayin biraz gec oldu unuttugum verdigim spzu. Uyku saskini ufak yanlislar olabilir kusuruma bakmayin. İyi geceler.

Hello there , my name is Kadir Aslan. I am 16 years old. I haven't got any brothers or sisters , so I am the only child in my family. I am a student in Mehmet Akif High School. Before that , I graduated from Kazım Karabekir Primary School. I watch basketball matches in my free times. In the future , I want to be a student of Dokuz Eylül University. I want to study at Toursim Faculty, so Tourism is my dream job. Actually ,my mother is working in Çırağan Palace Hotel so that I want to work there in the future. As I said , I want this job because members of my family have really good career in this business area also I want to be a person like them. In the business life , I will take care of money and goodness of working conditions. Also , I like Rihanna and I listen to her quality songs.